Descriptive Writing – The Olympics

4KM and 4KJ have loved learning about the Olympics over the past four weeks.

We have enjoyed reading and researching the Olympic Games but…a picture tells a thousand words!

One of our writing tasks this week involved describing photographs of athletes from the Olympic Games. Using newspaper photos, students had to describe what was happening in the pictures. They had to consider who was in the picture, what they were doing, the background and how the athletes were feeling when the photo was taken.

We hope you enjoy the selection of photographs and our descriptions.

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What did you think of our descriptions?

Have you ever taken a really great photo? Can you describe it?

Turning Sounds into Words

4KM and 4KJ have been doing some more descriptive writing this week.

Yesterday they listened to this rainforest soundtrack while trying to put into words what they were picturing in their heads. The students couldn’t watch the video, just listen.

Maha: The birds chirping sounds like a pleasant whistle and the thuder is deafening. The wind is absolutely calm and it makes the chirps sound light and soft. The rain sounds like it is hitting the bank of a river. As the water rushes down the bank, it makes a relaxing sound.

Brandon: Birds are chirping in trees as you are hearing a small waterfall in play. Small drips come down from trees as small storms rumble the earth. There is a soothing sound of wind floating through the trees. Gently, pieces of water go up through the tide while a storm grows louder and louder. Raindrops now pelt down on the water.

Jess: Birds are chirping with the sound of thunder in my eardrums. I can hear the sound of trees rustling with thunder through it. The birds are like a song in my mind and it feels like they want to wake me up. Rain is pouring down with a couple of little tip taps. The tapping of the rain is very loud and clear.

Today the students listened to a different soundtrack and tried to describe what they were hearing and imagining.

Thomas: Noisy trains pull up at the big train station. Someone is puffing and panting through the city. A lot of loud music plays in the beautiful streets. Cars rumble right through the busy city as people talk really loudly. People are honking horns in their big cars as children and parents run through the crowded streets.

Iesha: Noisy people are chatting on the freeway as lots of ear piercing trucks screech by. A loud wedding in a tall church plays music. Lots of honking horns come from bad tempered drivers. The long traffic jams make people late for work, plane rides and school.

Travis: The angry policeman chases the streets after a man who just ran a red light. People trip as the man pushes them out of the way. Cars screech their brakes as the man dodges traffic and runs across the road. 

What did you think of our descriptive writing?

What adjectives did you see in the students’ writing?

Can you write a description of one of the soundtracks?

Describing Geelong

Our focus in writing is descriptive writing.

To make our writing interesting to read, we are including lots of adjectives in our texts. Adjectives are describing words, and they help you to make a picture in your mind while you are reading.

Last week we wrote descriptive texts about places in our city, Geelong. Our town, Leopold, is a suburb of Geelong. Geelong is the second largest city in Victoria and there are lots of attractions for families to visit in the area.

We hope you enjoy reading our descriptions.

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To learn more about Geelong, why not check out the official Geelong and the Bellarine visitor information website.

Did you enjoy our descriptive writing?

Where would you like to visit in Geelong?

Can you describe a place in your town or city?