Good writers can create a picture in their readers’ minds.
They can do this by:
- using interesting vocabulary
- elaborating on details
- showing, rather than telling, some of the details
- describing all five senses (what can be seen, heard, tasted, felt and smelt)
- using lots of adjectives (describing words)
- using metaphors or similies to compare two things
- using synonyms (words with similar meanings) to make interesting word choices.
The students in 4KM and 4KJ were given the following short, uninteresting recount.
Miss Jordan and Mrs Morris went to the beach. They put down their things and went for a swim. They sat on the sand. Then they went home.
The children were asked to edit the writing to make it more interesting. They only had a short amount of time to do this but many students did a great job of creating a mind picture for their readers.
Here are some improved recounts by Ella, Harry, Logan M, Paris, Millie and Rochelle.